The chart below shows the global sales of different kinds of digital games from 2000 to 2006.

The chart below shows the global sales of different kinds of digital games from 2000 to 2006.
The given chart illustrates the number of each type of digital
games’
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sales internationally between 2000 and 2006. The most obvious piece of information is that all
of
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digital
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the digital
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games
was
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increasing gradually except for console
games
which
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declined over time. As is observed, it is obvious that online
games
jump twice
in
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every two years as same as mobile phone
games
which rise up to 6$BN for six years. Meanwhile, the progress of
handheld
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remained static.
On the contrary
, console
games
srinked
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sprinkled
to 50% for 6 years.
To sum up
, digital
games
was
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increasingly developing over time and became
people
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people's
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choice to enjoy their time.
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