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The chart below shows the global sales of different kinds of digital games from 2000 to 2006.

The chart below shows the global sales of different kinds of digital games from 2000 to 2006.
The given chart illustrates the number of each type of digital
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games’
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games
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 sales internationally between 2000 and 2006. The most obvious piece of information is that all
of
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digital
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the digital
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games
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was
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 increasing gradually except for console
games
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 which
was
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declined over time. As is observed, it is obvious that online
games
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 jump twice
in
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every two years as same as mobile phone
games
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 which rise up to 6$BN for six years. Meanwhile, the progress of
handheld
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 remained static.
On the contrary
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, console
games
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srinked
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sprinkled
 to 50% for 6 years.
To sum up
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, digital
games
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was
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 increasingly developing over time and became
people
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people's
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 choice to enjoy their time.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words games with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Global sales
  • Digital games
  • Trends
  • Emergence
  • Decline
  • Console games
  • Handheld games
  • Popularity
  • Steady increase
  • Online games
  • Mobile phone games
  • Technological advancements
  • Consumer behavior
  • Subsequent growth
  • Noticeable changes
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