A large company in your area has decided to spend a certain amount of money, either to sponsor a local children’s sports team for two years, or to pay for two open-air concerts. It has asked for feedback from the general public. Write a letter to the company. In your letter, describe the benefits of sponsoring the sports team summarise the benefits of paying for the concerts say how you think the company should spend the money Write at least 150 words.

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Dear Mis MK, I hope

this

letter finds you well.

This

is Iman who Lives in the same neighborhood where your company is located at. I am writing

this

letter to give you the required feedback.

To begin

with the advantages of sponsoring the sports team,

Firstly

, motivate children to persevere in their hobbies.

Then

, give poor kids an opportunity to play sports. and

lastly

, Keep them busy in their free time.

However

, there are some good impacts of paying for concerts

such

as supporting people to attend concerts to have fun and

also

it makes people feel that they are a part of the community by attending concerts for free.

Furthermore

, supporting individuals who have a hobby like singing to show up. I believe you should spend the money wisely which will be divided on both to ensure fairness among people. Thank you for your time and consideration. Regards, Iman

Submitted by imanmuhamed.3089 on Wed May 31 2023

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7 paragraphs

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