you eat at your college cafeteria at lunch time every day.. However, you think it needs some improvements. Write a letter to the college magazine. In your letter: explain what you like about the cafeteria say what is wrong with it suggest how it could be improved

Dear Sir/Madam, I am writing in connection with our college cafeteria. Since almost every student spends time there every day. I think there should be some improvements in the quality of the central eatery. Even though the cafeteria is well-planned and infrastructure is
also
up-to-date.
However
, it still lacks in some areas. The major problem which almost every student faces is a limited choice of food. As we know, half of the students are from overseas and have their own food.
However
,
due to
fewer ,options it's very hard for them to get their desired meal within the canteen.
Although
it's the central and busiest eatery of the college, unfortunately, their service is very slow
due to
fewer employees. I am sure if we will offer a wide range of food with fast service , profit will hike within months. Hope you will think about my concern and suggestions. Yours faithfully, Navjot Kaur
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