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One of the most commonly shared consensuses these days is that the most favoured way to improve road safety is to increase the minimum permitted age for driving. Agree or Disagree?

One of the most commonly shared consensuses these days is that the most favoured way to improve road safety is to increase the minimum permitted age for driving.
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, there is no absolute agreement on
this
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 matter
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 the split opinions, so the following essay will discuss both sides and provide a proper conclusion. Some
people
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 claim that the majority of youngsters do not own serious intentions beyond driving. Not only do they view it as
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entertainment and act irresponsibly, but they
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 frequently cause accidents.
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, injudicious things they tend to do for joy ordinarily come across as
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 to
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road security. Getting inebriated or driving with extremely loud music is a good example of
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. Adolescents should be more observant in case they are willing to avoid unfortunate difficulties. Turning to the other side of the argument, it is not so fair-minded to blame the younger population in most incidents. Viewing them as the main reason for the most troubles makes other
people
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 clean-handed, when in fact, it is not true.
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 fun and
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 youth is what teenagers wish for.
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, why is nothing being said about the adults who cause disasters by being careless regarding safe driving
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 The vast majority of mature
people
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 nowadays navigate inattentively, by disobeying the rules.
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, the general public still manages to accuse young
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 only. To summarize, by taking everything stated into consideration, I believe that
rising
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 the legal driving age
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strictening
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christening
 existing regulations would make a great impact on better on-road safety. The preferred age for driving is 21 years in
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 number of developed countries.
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 appears to be a good decision
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 since it is proved that less amount of accidents
occur
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 in those nations.

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