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How do you think about different ages of people purchasing albums

#ages #people #albums
the different ages of society purchasing
albums
 are so significantly different. They have different tastes in music and preference for
albums
.
to begin
 ,
with
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 teenagers and young adults like
albums
 that give benefit pictorial books and photocards,
for
example
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 k-pop
albums
. when you can describe teenagers, some of them are die-hard fans and they will purchase
albums
 more to get more photocard. Buying bulk and dumping their
album
 in the street are some of
serious
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 problems they give to us. And with massive bulk buy they make our earth has a lot of trash. Move to the old generation, they
love
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album
 more. So nostalgic they can dance with their friend and play
vynil
 together. For old
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people
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peoples
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vynil
 is the best
album
. Even now we use digital
albums
, they will always be stuck in
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the vynil
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vynil
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album
. So conclusion for young age they
love
 digital
albums
 and cd
albums
 that have
photocard
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photocards
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, they
love
 that
album
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albums
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 give so much benefit to them.
For old
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people
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 they
love
 melody so they will always choose
vynil
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vinyl
 to enjoy music with their
friend
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friends
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. Some people
has
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 they preference to enjoy music.
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