Experts believe that, over the next decade, robots will be doing many of thejobs currently done by humans. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of this.

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,
technology
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development make big progress. The project of
robots
got a major breakthrough. Flowing the diverse
robots
appear in
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of
people
.
Robots
start to replace
people
to finish some
jobs
. It is
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highly
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this
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situation that smart
robots
have slowly
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people
. Some experts strongly support
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development
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robots
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. In
this
essay, I will discuss both the positive and negative aspects of
this
new development.
To begin
with, the biggest advantage of
robots
is that they finish work efficiently and never make mistakes. The core of
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made of
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.
Therefore
, they are able to calculate and accurately predict the best way to achieve goals.
Furthermore
,
robots
can keep working all day. Because they don’t have life and won’t feel tired.
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,
robots
can keep
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state every time, whilst
people
need enough rest after working. What’s more, another benefit of
robots
is that they can finish
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jobs
. A lot of
robots
are able to normally work in extreme weather. For
examly
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example
,
robots
always are used to explore
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desert
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and
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mountains.
Furthermore
, more and more
robots
enter outer space searching.
However
, there are
also
some drawbacks to
robots
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. The most significant disadvantage of
robots
is that they occupy
people
’s
jobs
. Amount of number
people
will lose
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jobs
. The rate of unemployment will be quietly increased.
In addition
,
people
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overly dependent on
robots
.
People
will
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their ability
of
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live. If
robots
can do everything,
such
as cook, teach and so on. We only need to eat and rest. It’s
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danger that
people
haven’t enough ability to control our world.
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consequently
, through the viewpoint and analysis in
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, there are positive and negative aspects
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robots
join
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people
’s life.
In contrast
,
robots
replace
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people
working is
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sword. I strongly believe that
robots
are good
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in
people
’s life and work.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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