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Teleworking has been on the increase in recent years. Do you think this is a negative or postive development ?

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In recent times, the use of the Internet is rapidly increasing. Ever since the pandemic, working from home has become very common. Though
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 has negative impacts like affecting the productivity of
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, I think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages of the development.
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 with, one of the positive aspects of online
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 is accessibility. A person can
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 from anywhere in the world, there are no in-person meetings or presentations.
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, you can attend meetings
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 you pick up your child from school.
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, teleworking employees could have more quality time with their loved ones
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 working, enriching the
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-life balance.
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 to
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, there is no hustle and bustle in the mornings to reach the office on time, guaranteeing a good sleep. Since
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 remote working has a positive effect on employees, many companies in Singapore have allowed their workers to
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 from home at least once a week.
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, though it has many positive effects on the employees, it is detrimental to the
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 because employers cannot monitor whether all the workers are working or not.
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 could lead to less productivity impacting the growth of a company. There is
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 a possibility of an employee working for different
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. In India, during the post-pandemic, many software engineers working from home were found to be working for more than 2
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 at a time. These are completely unacceptable and
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 should take steps to keep an eye on the employee
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 working remotely. To sum it up, even though
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 development has both positive and negative impacts, I think it is advantageous because the negative could be overcome by simply implementing some regulations to monitor the workers
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