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The graph below shows the number of overseas visitors to three different areas in a European country between 1987 and 2007 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of overseas visitors to three different areas in a European country between 1987 and 2007 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The graph illustrates the digit of
foreigner
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foreigners
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vistor
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visitor
visitors
 to
three
 different places in a European nation from 1987 to 2007.
Overall
, we can
observ
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observe
 in
line
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the line
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 chart that mentioned
three
 different
area
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areas
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 which
are
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is
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coast
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the coast
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,
mountain
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mountains
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 and
lakes
, where
most
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the most
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 visited
place
 by visitors was
lakes
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the lakes
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, and less visited
place
 was
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a mountain
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mountain
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mountains
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. On the one hand, The
lakes
 visited ratio in 1987
was
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drastic
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 declined which was 10
thounsands
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thousands
thousand
, it
continuesly
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continued
rose
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to rise
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 till 2002 (75 thousand)
that
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apply
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was
highest
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the highest
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vistor
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visitor
 ratio among
three
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the three
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place
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places
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,
then
 suddenly again dropped in 2007, 50
thousands
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thousand
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. The
mountain
 was
lowest
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the lowest
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 traveller
place
 by overseas
peoples
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people
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 from 1987 to 2007. The
coast
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cost
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 ratio was 40
thousands
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thousand
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 in 1987,
then
 it minimally decreased in 1992, it significantly
continuess
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continued
increased
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increase
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 till 2007
where
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when
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 75 thousand travellers
were
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visited in 2007.
In contrast
, In 1987 compared to all
three
 areas,
top
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the top
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 rate visited
place
 was
coast
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the coast
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 by outlanders,
on
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in
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second
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the second
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 number
mountain
 area, and
this
place
 was
lowest
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the lowest
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 visited in
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the begining
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begining
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beginning
 year. In 2007,
highest
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the highest
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 visited
place
 was
coast
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the coast
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 (75),
second
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the second
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 number
place
 was
lakes
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the lakes
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, and 3rd
place
 was
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the mountain
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mountain
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mountains
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 which was
lowest
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the lowest
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in
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apply
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among
three
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the three
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 places.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words three, coast, mountain, lakes, place with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "ratio" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Fluctuate
  • Significant
  • Trends
  • Comparative analysis
  • Peak
  • Trough
  • Growth
  • Decline
  • Steady
  • Surge
  • Plummet
  • Consistency
  • Highlight
  • Reinforce
  • Data representation
  • Time frame
  • Subject matter
  • Overseas visitors
  • Tourism promotion
  • Transportation
  • Accommodation facilities
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