You live in a small neighbourhood. An abandoned piece of land around the corner is not being utilized effectively. The council has sent out an opinion survey to see what the residents would like to use that area for. Option A: Children’s playground: This playground would include swingset, basketball court, baseball field and a skating arena. Option B: Health club: This health club would include sports facilities, personal training and group exercise classes.

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I personally feel that the health club is more suitable for our requirements. Tough the other choice is almost equally appealing, I would elucidate a couple of reasons to substantiate my argument.

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with, a health club will be a considerable choice for us as there are many youngster's in our small town.

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people are more health conscious and will encourage people of the town to stay fit through personal training and exercise sessions

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, most teenagers are interested in sports and it will create a lot of opportunities for them from our community.

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, the other option children's playground seems worthless, as many of the schools in our society

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basketball , baseball and other playground facilities. Considering all the assertions, I am of the opinion that

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club would be a more beneficial choice than the children's playground in our neighbourhood.

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Lexical resource: 6.0

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Grammatical Range: 6.0

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Task Achievement: 4.0

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