Some say that it would be better if the majority of employees worked from home instead of travelling to workplace every day. Do you think the advantages of working from home outweigh the disadvantages? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant example for your own knowledge or experience.

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The
last
50 years have seen a dramatic increase in the popularity of remote working. Yet, there remains some disagreement as to whether working from
home
is more beneficial than travelling to work or it should be banned.
Although
there are valid arguments to the contrary, in
this
essay I would contend that the advantages of working from
home
are incomparable with drawbacks. The reasons for
this
are as follows. First of all, it is an indisputable fact that despite the risk of social isolation working from
home
would lead to a plunge in traffic congestion
as well as
air pollution. So, working from
home
could lead to a decline in the amount of carbon footprint.
According to
the statistics, working from
home
during the pandemic Corona-Viruses, reduced the amount of traffic by 50%, and
consequently
caused a fall in air pollution by up to 30% in 2021.
Also
, these results lead to a dramatic decrease in ailments related to air pollution like Asthma and lung cancer. Yet, perhaps the strongest argument in favour of
this
issue is the convenience for employed parents who tend to have an eye on their children
while
they are working. Salient examples of
this
could be computer engineers architects or teachers, who could fulfil their parental tasks alongside professional duties with the help of the Internet and Email . Admittedly, rather than wasting time commuting, people could dedicate that time to their own interests
for example
exercising or meditating. By way of conclusion,
although
working from
home
would lead to some difficulties, I believe that the advantages of working from
home
outweigh the disadvantages.
Thus
, taking regulations to institutionalize
this
method of working from
home
is likely to contribute to appealing benefits.
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