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Popular events like the football World Cup and other international sporting occasions are essential in easing international tensions and releasing patriotic emotions in a safe way. To what do you agree or disagree ?

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Few topics have drawn as much scholarly attention as the importance of famous events in shaking off international stress.
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 there is a substantial debate over whether popular
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 play a key role in overcoming the tensions between
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 or it does not matter. I am of the opinion that the former proposition has several strong elements that merit serious consideration. A number of benefits can be attributed to big
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 events. On the
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 popular occasions as the football World Cup, Commonwealth Games, Cricket World Cup, and Asian Games, to name only a few, countries can bring a myriad of benefits, ranging from companionship to brotherhood between people. On the other, with the help of international
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 can bring all other
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 under
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 roof can talk on topics
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 as global warming. Examples of
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 scenario can be seen in many
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, be it Australia, Canada, The UK, Europe and the like, which organise a wide range of games to release patriotic emotions safely. Admittedly, It is true that there
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 a wide range of other methods to relax international tensions than extraordinarily expensive
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 occasions, and
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 cannot dismiss the importance of those factors.
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, these factors appear to be insignificant against the deluge of benefits huge
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 tournaments offer. In conclusion, I would not underestimate the concerns regarding other methods like conferences between
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 to exclusive reason to live stress-free. I feel that the role of significant events in decreasing anxiety between countries is instrumental indeed.
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