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Childhood obesity is becoming a serious problem in many countries. Explain the main causes and effects of this problem, and suggest some possible solutions.

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The prevalence of childhood obesity has been increasing recently and becoming an alarming issue. There are many factors leading to
this
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 disease,
such
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 as eating junk food, drinking soft
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 and a sedentary lifestyle. Absolutely, these factors could contribute to negative influences on the child. For that reason, it is necessary to take several methods to tackle the problem. Frequently consuming fast food
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sugary
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 soft
drink
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 is one of
major
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the major
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 reasons causing
the
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obesity among
childrens
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children
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. An excessive amount of calories beyond the needs of
children
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 is consumed by them on a daily basis, resulting in the accumulation of excess fat in the long run.
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,
McDonal’s
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McDonald’s
 and BBQ Chicken has long been known for its appeal to
children
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 through its Happy Meals, play areas and marketing strategies
targerting
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targeting
 young audiences. Another cause that has contributed to
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childhood overweight is that juveniles spend a
mojority
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majority
 of
time
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their time
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 playing computer
games
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. There are lots of gaming software
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aimed at
children
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, some of which create various types of video
games
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 to appeal
minors
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.
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, they could spend their entire day experiencing new
games
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 on the computer.
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, childhood obesity can lead to other more dangerous diseases,
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 as cancer and diabetes. A child
becomes
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 obese can cause deteriorated physical health, leading to a higher risk of developing severe illness. Because of that, it is
parents’
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parents
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 and schools’s responsibility to control the daily diet of the child, ensuring they have healthy and
balence
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balanced
balance
 meals.
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, parents need to restrict
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screen time as much as possible
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 and encourage them to be outside,
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 more physical activities,
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 as playing football, swimming and bike riding. In conclusion, it is
indisputible
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indisputable
 that snack food and online
games
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 are appetizing and engrossing for
children
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,
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 it significantly has a number of negative impact on juveniles.
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, adults should
stricly
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strictly
 control their child’s diet and screen time.
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