Consumers are faced with increasing numbers of advertisements from competing companies. To what extent do you think consumers are influenced by advertising? What measures can be taken to protect them?

Nowadays, the development of promotion brands from
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variety of companies is encountered by buyers. In my opinion, even though
this
issue will create the alteration of
people
’s
lifestyle
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, it still can be prevented
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the way which will be elucidated rigorously by me in
this
essay. First and foremost, facing the continuing improvement of an advertisement variety will be hard for some
people
as they have no ability to hold their desire to buy those products.
This
tendency is caused by various ads made by
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companies which are
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so that consumers will be compelled to open the web.
For example
, teenagers who previously tend to
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, after they felt curious to visit the platform,
they
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will explore all of the products there and just buy one for the first time, but in the following
days
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it is inevitable that they will repurchase.
Hence
, they will become hedonistic individuals who spend a lot of money without thinking about how
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brings advantages to their life.
Secondly
, the sophistication of web browsers helps
people
so much in terms of reducing the pop-up time of advertisements because
that is
the major reason that leads
people
to be consumptive, in which
this
marvel of human ingenuity can be the major solution to solve
this
problem.
Furthermore
, inhabitants can easily filter whether they want to see the ads or not through the
option
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button in each web browser.
Consequently
, on no account will advertisements appear on their device.
To conclude
, the effect of increasing the amount of advertising totally shifts our previous positive
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.
However
, I strongly believe that only later do
people
feel immediately protected after they apply
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provided in
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • advertising campaign
  • celebrity endorsement
  • psychological manipulation
  • emotional appeal
  • targeted advertisement
  • digital marketing
  • social proof
  • peer review
  • consumer trust
  • brand loyalty
  • misleading advertisement
  • government regulation
  • consumer protection
  • media literacy
  • ad-blocker
  • privacy settings
  • informed choice
  • critical thinking
  • marketing tactics
  • consumer awareness
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