The charts below compare the age structure of the populations of France and India in 1984.

The charts below compare the age structure of the populations of France and India in

1984.
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The diagram shows the contrast between the age difference of India’s and France’s population in 1984. These two pyramids, France on the left and India on the right are divided by two. On one side the males in blue and on the other females in pink.
Moreover
, each step of the pyramid is done every 5 years and the percentage changes depending on the year and gender.
First,
let us talk about the age contrast. As we can see the French population lives much longer than the Indian, there is a gap of 15-20 cohort. In the Asian country, there is a really young society, 7% is between the 0-5 bracket and the more the years increase the fewer Indians there are.
While
France is more regular, it remains between 3 to 4% for the 30-35 bracket and it is only after that, that it begins to decrease but very slowly
while
that of India only decreases over the year gaps.
Finally
, the variation in gender between these two countries. In France, there is a pretty similar percentage of the population in females and males, there is only a little more percentage on the female side during the first 60 years of life but after that, we can see that there is a clear difference between women and men, women have a much higher rate of life.
However
, in the Asian country, the number of women and men is very similar all their lives, It is fair on both sides.
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Vocabulary: The word "difference" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • charts
  • age structure
  • populations
  • France
  • India
  • 1984
  • overall
  • different
  • evenly distributed
  • proportion
  • young people
  • elderly individuals
  • largest age group
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