The table below shows the weight of people in a particular country from 1999 to 2009.

The table below shows the weight of people in a particular country from 1999 to 2009.
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The table displays a comparison between the weights of
men
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and
women
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, spanning a decade from 1999 to 2009. For the duration of the decade, normal
weight
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was the highest proportion for both
men
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and
women
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, fluctuating around the 50% margin. The largest deviation from 50% was for
men
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in 1999, where there were 41% of
men
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who had normal
weight
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. The data for
women
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showed consistency between all three
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ranges, with the underweight category having 27-29%, normal
weight
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being 47-51% and overweight being 18-21%, with the ranges in data being 2%, 4% and 3% respectively. The range in data for
men
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however
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, bigger for all three categories - 3%, 7% and 11% respectively, which shows a greater spread. The largest change was seen for
men
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in the overweight section as there was a decrease in overweight
men
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from 1999 to 2009.
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, the
weight
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of the
women
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in
this
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particular country was stable and did not see a significant difference. The
weight
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of the
men
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in
this
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same country fluctuated more than the
women
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, with the greatest difference seen in the overweight category. As the normal
weight
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category increased slightly, it may be assumed that the overweight
men
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lost
weight
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to become
normal
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a normal
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weight
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words men, women, weight with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "difference" was used 2 times.
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