The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
The chart describes the data about
families
weekly Change noun form
families'
family's
expenditure
prospects in 1968 and in 2018. The most significant spent
rate is on food with a 35% ratio in the year 1968. Housing and clothing come next with the same prospect of 10% of the weekly income. Replace the word
spending
Expenditure
on leisure, transport, personal goods
and household goods
are almost same
percentage, the former one is slightly more. Correct article usage
the same
Lastly
, spent
rates on fuel and Replace the word
spending
the
others are recorded Correct article usage
apply
the
least Change preposition
as the
with
Change preposition
at
a
6% in the year Correct article usage
apply
of
1968. Turning to 2018, Change preposition
apply
food
Correct article usage
the food
expenditure
of families had dropped dramatically to a percentage between 15 to 20. On the other hand
, housing spent
had Replace the word
spending
rised
significantly Correct your spelling
risen
raised
rise
with
Change preposition
by
an
almost 20% slightly more than food expenditures. The most crucial rise was recorded Correct article usage
apply
on
leisure Change preposition
in
spent
rates. It had soared Replace the word
spending
abut
10% in 50 years. Transportation Correct your spelling
about
expeditures
comes after and followed by Household Correct your spelling
expenditures
goods
and the othe
categories Correct your spelling
other
respetively
. Correct your spelling
respectively
Last
three Correct article usage
The last
had
remained the least just as in 1968 which Unnecessary verb
apply
is
fuel and power, clothing and Correct subject-verb agreement
are
footware
and personal Correct your spelling
footwear
goods
. Overall
, weekly expenditure
averages of families had dramatically changed over 50 years. Some spent
rates had remained the same Replace the word
spending
whereas
some of the alterations are quite noticable
.Correct your spelling
noticeable
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Vocabulary: Replace the words expenditure, goods with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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