The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of

new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and

make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph shows trends in shop
closures
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and
openings
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of new
shops
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in a particular country between the
years
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2011 and 2018. In 2011 approximately 6,400
shops
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closed. The
number
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of
closures
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fluctuated over the next four
years
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until 2015
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when there was a dramatic fall in
closures
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to roughly 700
shops
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. The following year the
number
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of
shops
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closing their doors rose sharply, reaching over 5,000. The figures remained steady for the next two
years
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, with just over 5,000
closures
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in 2018. The
number
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of new
shops
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opening decreased dramatically between 2011 (approximately 8,500) and 2012 ( just under 4,000) but rebounded by roughly 50% by 2014. In 2015, the
number
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of
openings
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then
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fell to the 2012 level
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but remained stable for the next two
years
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. The
last
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recorded year, 2018, saw a
further
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fall to 3,000 new
openings
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, the lowest point in
this
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seven year
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period.
Overall
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, the
number
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of shop
closures
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has remained within the 5,000 to 7,000 range (with the exception of 2015).
In contrast
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, new shop
openings
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have shown a wider range of figures, but generally indicate a downward trend over the same period.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words closures, openings, shops, years, number with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trends" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "fall" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "roughly" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "dramatic" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • retail landscape
  • net growth
  • market dynamics
  • economic indicators
  • fluctuations
  • pivotal
  • consumption patterns
  • e-commerce
  • brick-and-mortar
  • downward/upward trend
  • stabilize
  • recession
  • boom
  • retail sector
  • closure rate
  • inauguration/opening rate
  • consumer market
  • saturate
  • commercial viability
  • profitability
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