The chart below shows participation in certain leisure activities by children in Australia. Write a report describing the information shown below

The chart below shows participation in certain leisure activities by children in Australia. Write a report describing the information shown below
The bar chart shows the proportion of
boys
and
girls
, aged 5-14 years, engaging in five different activities in Australia. The modal
activity
is watching TV/videos with 100% of
boys
and 100% of
girls
engaging in
this
form of leisure.
Boys
overshadowed the
girls
in skateboarding, bike riding and electronic/
computer
games
,
whereas
girls
were
the
Change preposition
in the
show examples
higher proportion in arts and crafts. The largest difference in participation
of
Change preposition
in
show examples
activity
was seen in playing electronic/
computer
games
, with approximately 80% of
boys
and 60%
girls
Change preposition
of girls
show examples
. The least favoured
activity
for the
boys
was arts and crafts, whilst it was skateboarding for the
girls
. Aside from watching TV and videos, the next popular
activity
for
boys
was playing electronic/
computer
games
,
meanwhile
Add a comma
,meanwhile
show examples
there was a tie for the
girls
with bike riding and playing electronic/
computer
games
;
thus
the next populous
activity
, after watching TV/videos, was playing electronic/
computer
games
.
Therefore
, it is safe to say more children prefer their entertainment whilst relaxing and watching something rather than being required to physically move.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words boys, girls, activity, computer, games with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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