Some people think that governments should give financial support to creative artists such as painters and musicians. Others believe that creative artists should be funded by alternative sources. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Nowadays people have different
view
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of
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funding
on
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artists
.
While
some of them thought that it is unnecessary
things
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to do, others believed that there is have to be
certain
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amount of money for
artists
which will help spread types of
arts
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. In
this
essay, I will discuss both sides and why I
support
artists
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help themselves.
To begin
with, it is true that art is essential to human development
as well as
, enlightens humanity. To put it another way, humankind
is
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no longer
exist
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without music,
painting
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and painting
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in
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the whole time.
Moreover
, there is
financial
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a financial
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need from
government
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the government
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for some artistic action.
For instance
, In
UK
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the UK
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, recently there is
renewing
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act of statues and sculptures in many cities which is now
touristic
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area.
This
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renewals represent and strengthen
culture
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, cultural heritage and history of them,
for
this
reason, there is no way
to
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artists
can do
this
their
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own
fund
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funds
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. Without
these activity
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, historical and cultural
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things will deteriorate in future.
On the other hand
,
government
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the government
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has fields
that
is need
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more concerns and financial
supports
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support
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. To give a clear example, education, health and infrastructure,
these
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are essential to public
need
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needs
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at the moment. Another reason for opposing
to give
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monetical
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medical
support
to
artists
, is
musician
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musicians
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and
painter
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painters
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are
also
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a profession
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profession
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which
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can work and sell their art,
as
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and as
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a
result
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they can own their money through their work.
For instance
, in Los Angeles, Henry Taylor who is
portraitist
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, did his solo exhibition. Thanks to his talent, he obtained
support
from
private
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foundation.
To sum up
, some
kind
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of arts require financial
support
from
government
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the government
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however
, from my point of view, we should
support
other crucial fields right now.
Furthermore
, I can see that
artists
can find their own
support
also
they can earn their income as
another professions
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.
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