Some people think that governments should give financial support to creative artists such as painters and musicians. Others believe that creative artists should be funded by alternative sources. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
Nowadays people have different
view
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views
of
funding Change preposition
on
on
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for
artists
. While
some of them thought that it is unnecessary things
to do, others believed that there is have to be Fix the agreement mistake
thing
certain
amount of money for Add an article
a certain
artists
which will help spread types of arts
. In Fix the agreement mistake
art
this
essay, I will discuss both sides and why I support
artists
should
help themselves.
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who should
To begin
with, it is true that art is essential to human development as well as
, enlightens humanity. To put it another way, humankind is
no longer Unnecessary verb
apply
exist
without music, Correct subject-verb agreement
exists
painting
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and painting
in
the whole time. Change preposition
apply
Moreover
, there is financial
need from Correct article usage
a financial
government
for some artistic action. Add an article
the government
For instance
, In UK
, recently there is Correct article usage
the UK
renewing
act of statues and sculptures in many cities which is now Correct article usage
a renewing
touristic
area. Replace the word
tourist
This
renewals represent and strengthen Change the determiner
These
culture
, cultural heritage and history of them, Correct pronoun usage
their culture
for
this
reason, there is no way to
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apply
artists
can do this
their
own Change preposition
with their
fund
. Without Fix the agreement mistake
funds
these activity
, historical and cultural Change the determiner
this activity
these activities
value able
things will deteriorate in future.
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value-able
On the other hand
, government
has fields Add an article
the government
that
is need
more concerns and financial Change the verb form
need
supports
. To give a clear example, education, health and infrastructure, Fix the agreement mistake
support
these
are essential to public Correct pronoun usage
apply
need
at the moment. Another reason for opposing Fix the agreement mistake
needs
to give
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giving
monetical
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medical
support
to artists
, is musician
and Fix the agreement mistake
musicians
painter
are Fix the agreement mistake
painters
also
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a profession
profession
Replace the word
professionals
which
can work and sell their art, Correct pronoun usage
who
as
a Correct word choice
and as
result
they can own their money through their work. Add a comma
,result
For instance
, in Los Angeles, Henry Taylor who is portraitist
, did his solo exhibition. Thanks to his talent, he obtained Correct article usage
a portraitist
support
from private
foundation.
Add an article
a private
To sum up
, some kind
of arts require financial Fix the agreement mistake
kinds
support
from government
Add an article
the government
however
, from my point of view, we should support
other crucial fields right now. Furthermore
, I can see that artists
can find their own support
also
they can earn their income as another professions
.Replace the adjective
another profession
other professions
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