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In some countries students are required to learn a foreign language but in other countries it is not necessary to do so. Discuss the benefits of each case and give your opinion.

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I know how to speak 4
languages
 - I can read and write in 3
languages
 and can understand a
further
 6
languages
. The importance of learning different
languages
 is ingrained within me. When I travel, I am comforted by my ability to read the Cyrillic alphabet, or in my ability to converse with locals. I know I have the
upper-hand
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 in certain situations, as I am able to comprehend things others may not.
Hence
, I understand the benefits of learning foreign
languages
.
However
, I learned these
languages
 as a child. I grew up in a multilingual household, watching foreign films with subtitles and learned
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further
 three
languages
 at secondary
school
. These are the
languages
 that are still with me today as an adult. If I try to learn a new language now, it is very daunting. I find it incredibly difficult to perceive the Arabic alphabet or decipher accents - it takes a lot of my brain power to be able to learn something new. Somewhere between secondary
school
 and as an adult, I lost my ability to pick up
languages
. Learning
languages
 is an individual experience - some students pick up
languages
 much better than others, depending on which half of their brain is more dominant -
this
 can make
school
 either an enjoyable experience or a difficult one. For those who struggle to learn a new language,
school
then
 becomes a chore. It may even disrupt their education in other subjects, leading to an
overall
 downfall. There are many advantages of learning a new language,
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 it should always be a choice. Personally, I wish I had learned more
languages
 as a child and would have thrived if learning
languages
 was a requirement - but for
others
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this
 could be
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 psychologically damning experience.
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