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The pie charts give information about the three various elements (carbohydrates, protein and fat) of three meal plans, namely an average diet, a healthy diet and a healthy diet for sport.

The pie charts give information about the three various elements (carbohydrates, protein and fat) of three meal plans, namely an average diet, a healthy diet and a healthy diet for sport.
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The pictures show about three nutrients (carbohydrates, protein, and fat) of three kinds of
diet
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 namely a normal
diet
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, a healthy
diet
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, and a healthy
diet
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 for
sport
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.
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, carbohydrates are the main component in a healthy
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 for regular and sports
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 fat is the least nutrient on the
diet
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 menu. It can be seen clearly that the proportion of carbohydrates in a healthy
diet
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 for
sport
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 is 60%. These percentages are 10% higher than the healthy
diet
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 and 20% in the average
diet
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.
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, people who follow the average
diet
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 consume 40% protein compared with the healthy
diet
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 and a healthy
diet
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 for
sport
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 is 30% and 25% respectively. Fat intake is got by the average
diet
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 and the healthy
diet
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 is a fifth of the total calories at 20% and a healthy
diet
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 for
sport
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 contains 15% of lipids.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words diet, sport with synonyms.
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