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More and more people prefer to read e-books rather than paper books. What are the reasons for this? What problems can this cause for libraries?

#people #e-books #paper #books #libraries
Most of the
people
 today choose to read electronic documents
such
 as
books
 and pdfs over
paper based
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materials
.There are many reasons for
this
 trend in
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society which could be
irresitstable
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irresistible
 today. With the advancement of the technology of the computer, many find online reading
cheaper
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a cheaper
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 and faster way to gather information.It is seen that
the
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knowledge is at the
finger tip
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 of your electronic device like a simple mobile phone.
Firstly
, the
time
 and money spent
over
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 travelling is saved by
the
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online reading
books
,
that
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 allows
to
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one to
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 download
the
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particular
books
 for later use.
This
facilitate
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 the reader to use the
books
 over a long period without spending
time
on
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handing
over
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them over
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 like
a typical
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a typical library book
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library
books
.
Secondly
, it is much easier to access
wide
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 variety of
materials
while
 using
the an
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 electronic device.
People
 do not need costly computers or tablets
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similar work could be done with the help of a mobile.
Moreover
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 mainly a person can access hundreds of
e
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e-books
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books
while
 travelling or in his
lesuire
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leisure
time
 without visiting a
library
.
People
 spending more screen
time
on
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reading online
,
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 would be reluctant to go
for
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libraries
 and choose the book they desire.
This
 could cause the
libraries
 to introduce a new section for online reading and might cause
reduced
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 number of physical users in it.
This
 would deduct the income of the maintenance
libraries
.Alternatively,
libraries
 may have to introduce free wifi facilities to attract more
people
 to use their resources.
However
,
this
 would indirectly increase the utility bills of the
libraries
.
Additionally
,
staff
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 of the
libraries
 might be reduced and there is a risk of
employement
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employment
in
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 the
library
 staff.Electronic
materials
,which the
library
save
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 may erase or altered and any technological matters arising would make the readers arrogant over the internet access.
This
 would arise a need
of
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 a staff member to be online 24/7 for assisting and helping
in
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 technological problems they encounter.
To conclude
,
although
people
 find interested in reading
e
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e-books
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books
 using
internet
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the internet
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, using
paper based
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materials
 may reduce the harmful effects of
the
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health and visiting
to
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a
library
 would give
more
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them more
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oppertunities
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opportunities
 to interact with
the
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society which in a way would
beneficial
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 to improve interpersonal skills in
people
.
This
 will enable the
libraries
 to function as public areas
that
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 would be a great benefit for the community.
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