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Some people feel that equality between the genders has already been achieved while others feel there is considerable progress to be made. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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The difference between
sexes
 was very significant in history, males were always considered to be more prior than
females
.
While
 a group of individual believes that nowadays,
discrimination
 between
both
sexes
 is vanished, but another group of modernists claims that still there are differences between
both
 genders. I believe
,
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both
sexes
 should be given equal opportunities,
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 Government should take some major steps
due to
 which new job opportunities are equally available for
both
 males and
females
. In the looming paragraphs, I will discuss each aspect in detail. To commence with,
females
 have the liberty to choose any carrier options, earlier only
men
 were allowed to work in the Military but now
females
 are
also
 an integral part of the army.
Furthermore
, The ruling authorities took a major initiative in the corporate and business sectors as a matter of fact now women can
also
 raise funds for their own startups. In UAE,
females
 were not allowed to drive but now
females
 have complete liberty to do anything, they have their youtube channels, businesses, and jobs at good companies. It is an undeniable fact that still in some parts of the world
discrimination
 among
both
 gender is still there, not only
females
 but
men
 are
also
 not allowed to laugh in the local area. In South ,Korea no one is allowed to laugh in the public area and there is a big penalty for that.
Moreover
, in rural parts of India caste system is still practised
due to
 which
females
 are not even allowed to speak.
Therefore
, ruling authorities should look into these matters seriously, and take some initiatives to vanish
this
discrimination
. In a nutshell, every aspect has its pros and cons.
Although
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 in some sectors like corporate
females
 are now considered equal to
men
, and equal opportunities are available for
both
sexes
, I believe still there are an excessive number of countries where
discrimination
 between them is still practised,
men
 do not respect
females
, and crimes against
females
 are increasing.
Thus
, the Government should take some major steps to control it.
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