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The table and charts detailed below give information about the police budget in 2017 and 2018 in on area of Britain. The table illustrates where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed.

The table and charts detailed below give information about the police budget in 2017 and 2018 in on area of Britain. The table illustrates where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed.
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The table and charts indicate the information on the
police
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budget
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 and evaluation of the wasted
money
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 for
police
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 in 2017 and 2018 in one region of Britain. From an
overall
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 perspective, the total
police
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budget
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 has increased in 2018 compared to 2017. And the outcomes of
money
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 spent are slightly punctuated in these two charts.
Firstly
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, in 2017 and 2018, the total
police
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budget
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 comparatively raised from 304.7m to 318. 6m. The distributed amount of
money
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 to the National Government 's 175.5
m
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 in 2017 up to 177.8
m
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 and the Local Taxes 91.2m up to 102.3
m
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,
also
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 other sources' amount of
money
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 lifted by 0.5m, reached 38.5m in 2018.
Secondly
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, about the wasted
budget
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 on
police
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 between 2017 and 2018, the
police
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 salary fell from 75% to 69%.
It is clear that
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 buildings and transport remained the same by 17%,
also
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 technology has risen by 6% in 2018.
To sum up
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, the
police
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budget
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 in 2017 and 2018, provided a slight amount of
money
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 from the National Government, local taxes and other sources. The total
budget
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 reached 318.6m, which increased by 13.9%.
Moreover
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, the spent of
money
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 on salary is diminished by 6%.
Whereas
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 the spent
money
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 on techs is lifted by 6%.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words police, budget, money, m with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • budget allocation
  • funding sources
  • government policies
  • economic conditions
  • community services
  • crime prevention
  • public safety
  • significant increase/decrease
  • distribution
  • assessment
  • reflection
  • allocation shifts
  • budget comparison
  • impact analysis
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