Some children spend hours every day on their smartphones. Why is his the case? do you think is a positive or a development?
Electronic devices like
smartphone
and Fix the agreement mistake
smartphones
ipad
are the tool used by Correct your spelling
iPad
children
to spend their
most of Correct pronoun usage
apply
the
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their
time
. This
essays
will describe the particular Fix the agreement mistake
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reasons
why it is
happened and the negative impact of that phenomenon.
There are particular Unnecessary verb
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reasons
why children
use
most of their children
on smartphones
. First,
there is
no specific rules and schedules applied by their Correct subject-verb agreement
are
parents
how
long their Change preposition
on how
children
may access smartphones
. Their parents
tend to give their children
free time
to use
smartphones
in which they do not interfere parent’s
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with parent’s
activities
. Thus
, besides
school work children
uses most their
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of their
time
alone with gadget because their parents
let it
be so that become a habit for Correct pronoun usage
them
children
, after school
they can Add a comma
,school
use
gadgets because there is
no Change the verb form
are
activities
scheduled by parents
. Correct pronoun usage
their parents
Second,
most of media
content consumed by Correct article usage
the media
children
lead
to addiction. The stimulus (visualisation, music, and content) from social media that Correct subject-verb agreement
leads
children
watch providing
the feeling of addiction.
Spending most of the Wrong verb form
provides
time
to
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using
use
smartphone
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smartphones
for
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with
children
is drawback
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a drawback
development
. The reason is children
do not control their self yet,
so that they cannot allocate Remove the comma
apply
time
wisely. The pleasure feeling of accessing content leads children
to ignore others
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other
activities
such
as study, exercise, and play in which most of those activities
are pivotal for children
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children's
development
. For instance
, the child and adolescent development
study said that there is decreasing of
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in
children
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children's
development
compare
to 20 years ago; lacking Wrong verb form
compared
of
stimulus or Remove the preposition
apply
activities
is the reason behind it.
To sum up
, the reasons
why these days, young
generation Correct article usage
the young
use
their free time
on smartphones
are there is
no specific rules and schedule for Change the verb form
are
children
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children's
activities
after school and feeling
of pleasure from accessing smartphone lead Correct article usage
the feeling
children
ignore
other Fix the infinitive
to ignore
activities
. Based on the
Correct your spelling
these
reasons
, it is known that negative development
is greater where children
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children's
development
are
decreasing because lacking Correct subject-verb agreement
is
of
stimulus.Remove the preposition
apply
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