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Traffic jams are a problem in many towns and cities today. Some people say that the solution is to build wider roads. Do you agree or disagree?

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In recent times, traffic
congestion
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 has become a major problem in many cities and towns around the world. Some suggest widening up the
roads
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 could be the possible solution to address the issue. I strongly agree with
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 suggestion and
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 essay will examine the reasons why it cannot be a possible solution.
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 with, in most cities, widening the
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 is not possible because of its infrastructure and it is quite a tedious process.
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, the narrow
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 in a developed city have high-rise buildings on both sides, to expand the
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, the buildings have to be demolished.
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, broader
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 do reduce
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 but do not have a significant effect as the problem is caused
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 the number of vehicles.
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, it is better to consider other feasible solutions to reduce the traffic.
On the other hand
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, imposing higher taxes on private vehicles like cars can be implemented by the government.
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 gives an opportunity for the buyers to reconsider their decisions.
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, in Singapore, the government charges higher carbon emission taxes around 40,000$ when purchasing a car. Other methods like concessions for people travelling before peak hours and for people using public transportation.
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 could reduce the
congestion
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 during peak hours. To summarize, the expansion of
roads
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 is one of the possible solutions to tackle
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 but practically, it is not feasible and lesser effect on
congestion
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 compared to other means. Laws governing road and traffic could be modified to resolve the issue effectively.

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task response
Stay closely focused on the topic throughout the essay to ensure a complete response.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Traffic congestion
  • Alleviate
  • Commuter
  • Carpooling
  • Rush hour
  • Carbon footprint
  • Urban planning
  • Mixed-use neighborhoods
  • Cycling lanes
  • Pedestrian paths
  • Intelligent traffic systems
  • Congestion charges
  • Peak times
  • Telecommuting
  • Public transportation
  • Remote working policies
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