Some scientists believe that in the future computers will be more intelligent than human beings. While some see this as a positive development others worry about the negative consequences. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Nowadays, some scientists believe that in the future computers will be more intelligent than human beings.
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as a positive development other
people
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disturbed by artificial intelligence. From my perspective, I find
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as a positive development. There is one main reason why I think so. The reason is
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artificial
intelligance
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intelligence
makes
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easier.
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First
,
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example is our communication. Today we are able to communicate with
people
without leaving our beds, we can work with visiting offices, we can pass the exams absolutely
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remotely
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leads us to
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, it would rather save our
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one. I can
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it by
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example.
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people
like web designers spend a lot of
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basic small elements for websites. That can be retouching photos, manual cutting of
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photos, making different icons for websites, or composing articles for websites, when with artificial
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intelligence
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to skip
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part of work. They can use GST chat
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which already
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commitmet
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commitment
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this
job.
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Unfortunately
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another side of
this
reality exists. As I
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mentioned
before, overusing of
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technologies
leads to
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the lazy
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type of
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. We have a huge gap with reality. During
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with our close
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we scroll our phones all the
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their jobs in the future
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because robots will replace
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humans. Partially, I agreed with
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negative consequences. But
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nevertheless
, I tend to support the development of artificial
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intelligence
and technology in general. I believe that everything depends on our
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. I can use technologies in different ways. It depends on what way I will choose.
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, the way we will use the technologies
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on us only. We need to be the same wave with
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time
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robots won't replace us.
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