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In some countries, many more people are choosing to live alone nowadays​ ​than in the past. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

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In some nations, recently more folks are living
seperately
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separately
 comparing to the older times. In my
opnion
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, I personally think
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 is a drawback in the community. In
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 I would like to point out several reasons.
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, living alone can cause mental stress on people. when a person is in need to express feelings at a time and when there is no one to share the emotions and feelings, may cause mental instability of that particular person. Ultimately
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 anxiety and stress leading to suicidal attempts.
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 in
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 generation, we could see extended families that care for each
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.
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 it certainly causes negative effects on the nation.
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,
seperately
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separately
 living in another place without any family members may be a threat to
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security,
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 for females. They will be vulnerable to abuse and violence in
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society by criminals. More often they are news
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 ladies being victims because of isolation from the community. Close relatives may
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 be stressed, because of
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 matter. In past most
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women got their security
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family members.
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 I strongly believe that it is a minus point in the relationships.
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 there are advantages
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 living alone.
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 would include less living costs over food and utility bills.
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, it is not a good trend to live
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separately
 as it has more problems and
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 to the persons.
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, more people
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 nationalities prefer to live alone in
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 than in past.
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 is a negative impact on the development of
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society
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personal relationships.
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