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In some countries, many more people are choosing to live alone nowadays​ ​than in the past. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

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In some nations, recently more folks are living
seperately
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separately
 comparing to the older times. In my
opnion
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opinion
, I personally think
this
 is a drawback in the community. In
this
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 I would like to point out several reasons.
Firstly
, living alone can cause mental stress on people. when a person is in need to express feelings at a time and when there is no one to share the emotions and feelings, may cause mental instability of that particular person. Ultimately
this
 may
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 anxiety and stress leading to suicidal attempts.
However
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 in
older
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 generation, we could see extended families that care for each
others
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.
Therefore
 it certainly causes negative effects on the nation.
Secondly
,
seperately
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separately
 living in another place without any family members may be a threat to
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security,
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 for females. They will be vulnerable to abuse and violence in
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society by criminals. More often they are news
on
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 ladies being victims because of isolation from the community. Close relatives may
also
 be stressed, because of
this
 matter. In past most
of
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women got their security
by
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family members.
Therefore
 I strongly believe that it is a minus point in the relationships.
However
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 there are advantages
in
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 living alone.
This
 would include less living costs over food and utility bills.
Overall
, it is not a good trend to live
seperately
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separately
 as it has more problems and
challenging
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 to the persons.
To conclude
, more people
in
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few
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 nationalities prefer to live alone in
present
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 than in past.
This
 is a negative impact on the development of
the
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society
as well as
in
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the
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personal relationships.
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