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In some countries, many more people are choosing to live alone nowadays​ ​than in the past. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

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Compared with the past , in some
countries
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 there are numerous
people
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 who need to
choose
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 stay alone rather than a couple or family. In my view, I partially agree with
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 there are some positive aspects in terms of having
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 flexibility, loneliness and anxiety feeling are the key component to provide adversely affected. Positively defined,
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 many factors which
people
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 are facing
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these days
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 crisis or social interaction, it would provide them to stay alone.
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 management and
cost
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 of living, are the main reasons to make them decision. From a pragmatic point of view,
people
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 can manage their finances in
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 model, so it can reduce the
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 of living in their
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.
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, the
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 flexibility in their
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life style
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lifestyle
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 is easily optimized management more than a couple or family.
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, living alone not only
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 can schedule their
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 but
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 reduces the
cost
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 of living in their
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. Despite the positive development, it is important to acknowledge the detrimental effects of staying alone.
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, it can
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 contribute
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to feeling loneliness, which has made them harmful in the long
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 as overthinking. Another point is that mental health problem, anxiety, is a kind of mental health disorder. A well-known example is depression disease.
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, it has negative effects on their
life
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. In conclusion, it is clearly seen that the trend of
people
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 living alone in many countries is increasing owing to having
time
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 flexibility and reducing the
cost
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 of living, depression is the main aspect related to the health problem. In the future, we must have some international regulations or rules in order to prevent
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 society and lacking working forces.

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I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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