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Some people believe that it is the responsibility of individuals to take care of their own health and diet. Others, however, believe that governments should make sure that their citizens have a healthy diet. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

#people #responsibility #individuals #care #health #diet #governments #citizens
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 many
people
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 think that it’s the responsibility of each individual to take care of their own
health
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, Others believe in governmental regulations about citizens'
diet
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. I agree more with the former. Is being thoughtful about your
health
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 and
diet
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 enough to live longer?
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 a question individuals may ask their
governments
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. Since one of the main obstacles in the way of
food
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 companies making healthier
food
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 is law legislation,
people
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 consider
governments
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 to have a powerful role in the community’s
health
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 and
diet
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.
Governments
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 can ban unhealthy products from their agricultural roots, so that, bad products wouldn’t be able to reach
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people’s
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 markets.
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, laws only limit
food
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 companies and it is
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people’s
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 responsibility to consider the nutrition and
health
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 of their own meals. Even though
governments
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 restrict
food
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 producers,
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people’s
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 healthy
diet
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 is of their own making. It is nearly impossible to limit
people
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 on how they eat or live and it’s known that if you limit and restrict
people
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 from doing something, their urge to do it will increase rapidly.
Governments
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 should help
people
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 by advertising healthy diets, so that, they could change
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people’s
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 culture and norms. Provided that, I think
governments
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 should go
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people
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 to help them make a healthier community. Since
governments
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 are part of
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people’s
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 communities, they should make ways that
people
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 would access finer goods and healthier materials.
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, I think
governments
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 have a strong ability to change
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people’s
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 lives but it couldn’t be possible if
people
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 wouldn’t want to change.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • health-conscious decisions
  • self-discipline
  • informed choices
  • personal accountability
  • regulating food industries
  • implementing policies
  • healthy eating
  • public health campaigns
  • subsidies for healthy food
  • enabling environment
  • accessible
  • affordable
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