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Cycling is a healthier and more environmentally friendly means of transport. Nevertheless, cycling is getting less popular. What are the reasons of this trend? What can be done to make cycling more popular?

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Cycling is a type of transportation
that is
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 more healthy and more beneficial to the environment but remains uncommon. I believe that when
people
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 used a bicycle they get tired easily and bikes are not capable of transporting big
families
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 from one place to another. There are reasons why cycling remains unpopular in our time.
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,
people
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 that are travelling or commuting do not want to get tired. They want to conserve their energies because their jobs could easily exhaust their physical and mental well-being. They could
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 use the extra time for sleeping especially when they only have a small amount of sleep but have to attend to their work the next day.
Families
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 that are big, prefer cars to cycling because sometimes they are travelling or moving from one place to another.
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, many
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 in the USA are travelling on their RVs, which is popular among Americans who are exploring their country. These RVs
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 serve as their home containing a kitchen, bedrooms, and other basic needs. Many countries have advocated the use of cycling.
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, the Dutch government have successfully turned Amsterdam to become the cycling capital of the world. They have developed their roads and created parking lots for bike users across the city.
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 there are still
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 who used their cars, almost half of the population in the city are using bicycles as their major means of transportation. Other European cities that have problems with traffic congestion and pollution began following the techniques and rules that the Dutch government implemented in Amsterdam. In conclusion, cycling is exhausting for many
people
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 and huge
families
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 that are travelling needed a bigger transportation vehicle
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, cycling could be popular if the government can encourage
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 to use their bikes in order to become healthy and environmentally conscious.
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