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In the future, nobody will buy printed newspapers or books because they will be we able to read everything they want online without paying. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#future #nobody #newspapers #books
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In the next years,we will see
people
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purchase
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newspapers
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 or
books
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 because they will be free on the Internet,l personally disagree with
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 development because the authors and
newspapers
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 don’t any achieving any wins and several
people
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 will lose their jobs.
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,l think that
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 is awful for authors and
newspapers
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 will not get any money for their hard jobs,one only thing which will get it it’s famous but any income,there are cases force us to read on the internet like sell all copies in the shops so we reached in online,
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 companies will lose a lot of employment which they are copies
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 and cavers because they do not require them,
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 ,a recent study found to percentage parchment became reduced in Dubai.
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, we should reduce the need for technology,the online become everything in our life and that’s not healthy for our eyes and brain, in my ,opinion human needs to space without technology, reading
books
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, created us to relax, and develop knowledge particular children and teenager we should encourage them on
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 , example when we go and copy, we see the phenomenon, young
people
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, which studying or reading on laptop, or iPod, except old
people
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 who prefer, unit
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 moment, reading the newspaper. In conclusion ,
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, control online becomes scared loss a lot of
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 do their jobs because of
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 involvement, I think
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 in our bags at travel and on train or plane is useful ,especially if end charger, laptop, or iPod.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • accessibility
  • convenience
  • cost-effective
  • cultural value
  • sentimental value
  • reliability
  • distracting
  • access to
  • digital devices
  • internet
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