The diagram shows the process by which milk and related products are produced. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features. Write at least 150 words.

The diagram shows the process by which milk and related products are produced.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features.

Write at least 150 words.
The diagram depicts all the stages involved in the production of packed milk and their related products with details ranging from the collection from its natural source to the commercial packages being available at the store. The major outlined steps are collection, preservation,transportation,processing and packaging. The cows are allowed to feed on healthy plants, in order to enhance the best quality in the natural substance.
Firstly
, with the help of a milky ,machine the organic dairy liquid is collected at the rate twice a day.Which is later stored in the refrigerator for a
while
.
Secondly
, the preserved product is transported to a dairy farm. In the industry,the liquid is passed through six big containers Where certain materials are added in each and
then
the revived substance is segregated for two purposes.One-half of the collection is pasteurised and packed into milk bottles and the rest is processed through various machines which form edible food like cheese, cream and butter. And
finally
, all the products are retailed to a local supermarket for sale.
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