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There are many ways for people to maintain contact with family and friends when living far away from each other. Some people believe that traditional letters are better than online methods of communication. To what extent do you agree with this point of view.

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People
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 have a variety of options to choose from when they want to keep in touch with friends and family. Some would argue that
letters
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 are the preferred choice.
Although
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letters
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 are the ideal option in certain situations, I am of the opinion that it is usually better to connect through
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internet
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 applications. There are a number of reasons why
letters
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 might be preferred to
internet
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communication
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. The fact that the writer cared enough to pay for postage is part of the reason why
letters
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 are so impressive. Indeed, in modern times,
letters
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 carry more meaning than they ever have because sending them is so rare.
Along with
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this
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,
letters
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 can be kept as memories, which is particularly appropriate for parents who have children abroad.
For example
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, my grandmother still has my father’s
letters
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 from when he travelled abroad for two years in the 1970s.
However
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, in most cases, modern means of
communication
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 are clearly better. The reality is that convenience is very important for
people
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 who like to maintain regular contact. Applications
such
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 as WhatsApp, Line, and Messenger are perfect for
such
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 cases because they allow
people
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 to call or text anytime from almost anywhere for free.
Furthermore
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,
internet
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communication
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 is instant and two-way. A letter can only express one person’s thoughts and experiences,
whereas
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 online
communication
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 allows both parties to share their feelings in
real time
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. In conclusion,
while
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letters
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 do have their place,
due to
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its
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their
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 convenience and instant nature, I believe
internet
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communication
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 is the best option for most
people
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 most of the time.

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coherence cohesion
Ensure each paragraph transitions smoothly to maintain the flow throughout the essay.
clear ideas
Your essay makes a compelling comparison between traditional letters and modern online communication methods, providing a balanced view.
introduction conclusion
The introduction clearly presents the essay's argument and sets up the main points effectively.
logical structure
The paragraph structure supports your argument well, with clearly defined main points and supporting details.
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