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Some people prefer to travel around town by car, while others prefer public transit such as bus, train, or subway. Discuss both these positions and give your own opinion.

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People
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 have different ways of thinking about travelling , some of them would like to
travel
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 by public
transport
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while
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 others prefer to commute on their own
while
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 . In
this
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 essay, I will discuss both the view and conclude with my opinion.
Firstly
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 , there is no doubt that public
transport
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 is the best way of commuting from one place to another because travelling by government
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 is economical and
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, it
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 protects our planet from air
pollution
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.
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, a recent survey from the Times of India revealed that 80% of
people
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 in Japan prefer to
travel
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 by public
transport
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 to save their country from
pollution
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 so I believe
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 why Japan has less
pollution
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 than other countries.
On the other hand
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 , Some
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 always prefer to
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 in a car
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 roaming here and there. They find that travelling in their own vehicle is more comfortable and easy .
People
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 think that travelling by bus or on any public
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 is more time consuming
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 they have to wait in a long queue to board a bus .
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 ,commuting in their own automobile is more convenient as they can choose music of their own choice music and routes as well.
For Example
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, If I go to the office on public
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 it takes almost one hour to reach the office and in my own car, I reach the office in twenty minutes. So travelling in own automobile is more efficient as compared to public
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.
To conclude
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 , To save our planet we should use public
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then
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 only we can get rid of air
pollution
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 .
This
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 is my suggestion to authorities is increase the bus frequency and other facilities as well so that
people
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 are happy be
travel
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 in public vehicles.
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task achievement
Make sure to fully develop your points with relevant examples. While you have provided some examples, further elaboration would strengthen your arguments.
coherence cohesion
Work on improving the logical flow between ideas. Some transitions between points could be smoother to enhance readability.
coherence cohesion
You provided a clear introduction and conclusion, which helps structure your essay well.
task achievement
The essay tackles both sides of the argument, demonstrating a balanced perspective.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • convenience
  • comfort
  • freedom
  • privacy
  • carbon footprint
  • cost-effective
  • traffic congestion
  • alleviate
  • urban infrastructure
  • balanced approach
  • peak traffic hours
  • commute
  • personal preference
  • lifestyle
  • sustainable transportation
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