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The chart below gives infomation about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reposrting the main features, and make comparisonss where relevant.

The chart below gives infomation about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reposrting the main features, and make comparisonss where relevant.
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The given bar chart illustrates the percentage of
families
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families'
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 weekly income in one nation and how they allocate their money in 1968 and in 2018.
Overall
, what stands out from the chart is that families spend most of their money
for
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on
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the
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basic need like food in 1968. Meanwhile, in the next 50 years, the average
of
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weekly spending are dominated
for
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by
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 Leisure. Looking at the details, as regards in 1968, 35% of weekly income was allocated to food and 10%
for
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 housing and clothing. Leisure, transport, and personal goods
were
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only contributed approximately 8% weekly spending of each
categories
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category
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. In 2018, the priority of family spending was changed
in
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which
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leisure and housing were the highest percentages at around 23% and nearly 20% respectively.
Furthermore
, in the past (1968) food was the biggest spending in the weekly earning but it just took about 17% in 2018. The least spending
were
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personal
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on personal
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 goods and fuel and power.
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