The diagram below shows how geothermal energy is used to produce electricity.

The diagram below shows how geothermal energy is used to produce electricity.
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The diagram below displays the method of generating
electricity
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, which comes from geothermal energy.
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, there are five main steps to generate
electricity
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from geothermal energy. It is started
with
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transferring
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cold
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water
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to
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underground and
ending
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up with a process of generating
electricity
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from
turbine
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a turbine
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and
generator
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a generator
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respectively. To start with, cold
water
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is
initially
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pumped down to the injection well
with
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approximately 4.5 km away from the top.
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, cold
water
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will undergo a geothermal zone, which is called
hot
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the hot
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rocks process and
then
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heated. After that, it is transferred to the production well where the hot
water
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is sent to the ground.
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this
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, the hot
water
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will be steamed at
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and will be moved through a small channel to
turbine
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the turbine
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machine.
This
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steam will make
turbine
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the turbine
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machine spin around and produce power for the
last
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process.
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, the generator will be worked by those spinning power and
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an
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electricity
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,
then
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it is ready
to
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for
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distribution for usage.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words electricity, water with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • geothermal energy
  • generate electricity
  • diagram
  • volcano
  • magma reservoirs
  • deep underground
  • heat
  • steam
  • geothermal plant
  • turbine
  • condensed
  • pumped back
  • underground reservoirs
  • transmitted
  • power grid
  • distribution
  • continuous
  • renewable
  • volcanic activity
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