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Some people think that it is a waste of time for high school students to study literature, such as novels and poems. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Whether the
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 should be removed from high schools or not is a debatable question. In fact,
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 have contrasting views on
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 proponents argue that it is a waste of
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, others think the opposite.
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 I agree that we should not force
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 into studying
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, it should be included in the curriculum as some
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 might enjoy it. On one hand, some
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 believe that studying
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 is just a bad utilization of
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time
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 should be used to focus on already existing
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, one of my friends, who wanted to become a computer engineer, considered English a waste of
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 because he already had too many
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 to prepare for.
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, he did enjoy reading novels in his spare
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, many would argue that it is very much needed. Reading novels and poems relaxes our minds.
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, it is not a waste of
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. A fresh mind can help a student study other
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 as well. A survey has found that in India,
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 who like
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 have a creative mind and are more likely to become successful. Not only
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,
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 make a career out of
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 by becoming a poet, writer or even editor. In conclusion, whether we should remove the
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subjects
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 in high school should be considered seriously.
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 an argument would say that
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, others claim it not only helps to relax our mind but
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 the
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. In my opinion,
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 I acknowledge that
students
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 need
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 to prepare for other
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, the
literature
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 should not be removed as it may prove helpful for some stud
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coherence cohesion
The introduction and conclusion are present but need more development and clarity. Work on providing a clearer overview of the main points in the introduction and the significance of the overall message in the conclusion.
task achievement
The essay provides a complete response to the question and presents clear and comprehensive ideas. However, there is a need to elaborate more on the significance of studying literature in high school and provide a stronger argument to support the conclusion. Ensure that the main points are effectively communicated and fully developed.
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