There is a disagreement on the impact of increased business and culture contact between countries on a country’s identify. What is your opinion?

There is no doubt these days many
countries
have to increase their business, so
that is
why they have to make a connection between cultures. In
this
essay, l am going to describe the reason and my own view. In terms of causes, if any
Country
want to depend on business they will make a connection between other
countries
. The main reason given to support
this
claim is that they have to export their
products
to many
countries
around the world to receive a great income and to evolve their
factories
and businesses. To illustrate,
China
has many businesses and
factories
, but they had to export their
products
because all the Chinese knew how to invent these
products
.
in other words
, if any
country
has a business they should make a great relationship with other
countries
.
Moreover
, if
China
manage
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all kind of
factories
they will
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a
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control of
invention
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. because
of
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the
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do not have
other
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another country
other countries
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country
with the same infrastructure and
worker
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.
consequently
, all the
countries
now have a
China
risk, and that
mean
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, if
China
stop
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work
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and
export
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exports
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their
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products
they have to create a solution,
for instance
, building
a local
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local factories
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factories
to depend on themselves rather than
China
.
Lastly
, we can say that many
countries
now try to build a strong relationship
between
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other
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another country
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country
because they want the benefit from their
products
and other collaboration between them. In conclusion, I believe that
countries
have to be nice to each other
,
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because we want the
the
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planet and people to feel calm and great.
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