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There is a disagreement on the impact of increased business and culture contact between countries on a country’s identify. What is your opinion?

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There is no doubt these days many
countries
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 have to increase their business, so
that is
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 why they have to make a connection between cultures. In
this
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 essay, l am going to describe the reason and my own view. In terms of causes, if any
Country
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 want to depend on business they will make a connection between other
countries
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. The main reason given to support
this
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 claim is that they have to export their
products
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 to many
countries
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 around the world to receive a great income and to evolve their
factories
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 and businesses. To illustrate,
China
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 has many businesses and
factories
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, but they had to export their
products
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 because all the Chinese knew how to invent these
products
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.
in other words
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, if any
country
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 has a business they should make a great relationship with other
countries
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.
Moreover
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, if
China
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manage
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 all kind of
factories
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 they will
has
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a
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control of
invention
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. because
of
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the
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they
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 do not have
other
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another country
other countries
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country
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 with the same infrastructure and
worker
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workers
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.
consequently
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, all the
countries
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 now have a
China
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 risk, and that
mean
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, if
China
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stop
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work
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working
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 and
export
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exports
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their
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its
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products
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 they have to create a solution,
for instance
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, building
a local
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local factories
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factories
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 to depend on themselves rather than
China
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.
Lastly
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, we can say that many
countries
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 now try to build a strong relationship
between
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other
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another country
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country
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 because they want the benefit from their
products
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 and other collaboration between them. In conclusion, I believe that
countries
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 have to be nice to each other
,
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 because we want the
the
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planet and people to feel calm and great.
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