The media is increasing interest in famous people who have ordinary backgrounds. Why do you think people are interested in their lives? Do you think this is a good thing?

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Many argue that the interest in media is increasing in famous regular and ordinary backgrounds nowadays.

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essay will discuss first my thoughts on why people are interested in their kind of activity, and second the reason for the goodness of it, straight to my opinion in summary.

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I think the public really wants to know other people's lives , especially in the past because of their habits of being curious about other's past.

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, it is like fear of missing out on other people’s information.

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, humans are more like to know the the struggle of those who have ordinary backgrounds until they are successful.

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, in my country in Indonesia, many channels especially night shows show the population who have a regular activities in the past. It is a good thing to show how they are fighting for their life.

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, there are a lot of benefits of knowing their activities in their previous lives, as the watcher can learn something from their speech.

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, they can tell their stories, starting when they did not have a good economy and how they struggled for their life until they became a rich person.

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, a lot of the crowd would be inspired by their stories and perhaps start to follow the path that those populations had. In summary, knowing people's situations in the past is not really that bad.

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, it could encourage those who are trying to make their lives better and is very useful for someone who has listened to them.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5

6.5

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

6.5

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 9.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.5

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

6.5

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

257 words

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celebrity
ordinary backgrounds
interest
curiosity
fascination
escapism
entertainment
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motivation
identification
relatability
social comparison
envy
public interest
negative effects
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