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Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information in the graphs below. You should write at least 150 words.

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The given two bar graphs illustrate the number of
deaths
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 and the medical research funding
on
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 six different
diseases
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 in Someland in the year 1990.
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, we notice that the number of
deaths
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 is lower in
the
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diseases
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 where money is spent on its research.
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 TB has the highest
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deaths
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,
money
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the money
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 spent is
lowest
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the lowest
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. Meanwhile, AIDS gets the biggest
fund
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.
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, death
due to
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 TB is highest, where around 1.75
million
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 people have died. It is followed by Diarrhoea, Malaria, Tropical
diseases
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, AIDS and
finally
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 Leprosy respectively, where they have less than 0.5
million
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deaths
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 each. Meanwhile, with a mammoth
fund
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 of around 175
millions
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million
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, AIDS got the biggest medical research
fund
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 among all the others. Leprosy and Tropical
diseases
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 have around 75
million
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dollars
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 each, followed by Diarrhoea with just above 50
million
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dollars
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 and Malaria with 50
million
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dollars
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. TB gets the lowest
fund
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, with just around 25
million
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dollars
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.
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