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The diagram shows the coponents of a neuron and how it Works

The diagram shows the coponents of a neuron and how it Works
This
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 figure depicts the components of a
neuron
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 and demonstrates how it is work. It is clear from the diagram that we have the
cell
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 body on the left side of the
neuron
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.
According to
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 what is shown the
neuron
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 has many components, and
start
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starts
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 from the left to the right with three important areas like the
cell
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 body surrounded by Dendrites, the Potential
has
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apply
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the Axon and Myelin Sneatn and
lastly
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 the Terminal buttons.
However
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,
this
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 equipment respectively assists to send
message
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messages
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 to the body starting from the Dendrites receiving the message from the
cell
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 and going away by the Axon to other neurons or muscles. After that arrive
to
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at
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 the Terminal buttons just send it to the other
cell
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, and
that is
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 repeated to all the
neuron
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 cells.
To sum up
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, we could say that the neurons have three parts, and it’s just used to receive and send to the other cells.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Contractions: Don't use contractions.
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words neuron, cell with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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