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In some countries, the government has tried to reduce traffic. For instance, they imposed a congestion tax during rush hour. Do you think this development is positive? or negative?

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It is prevalently observed that the authorities have tried to reduce traffic by imposing a
congestion
tax
 during rush hour. From
this
 aspect, questions about whether
this
 phenomenon is a positive or negative development are raised. In my opinion, imposing a
congestion
tax
 is ideal. Irrefutably, citizens are more likely to utilise public transport.
This
 is because they spend a small amount of transportation costs to take the transport compared to driving vehicles and rarely pay
congestion
 taxes.
This
 obviously leads to saving money and
this
 turn allows them to invest in other sectors,
such
 as housing rent, education, and living costs. What is more,
although
 the convenience of driving cannot be ignored, those who are not driving become healthy. In actual fact, health studies undertaken by experts have revealed that individuals walking or using transports tend to walk at least 30 minutes a day and have a low obesity rate so, they can live a prolonged life more than drivers.
Nevertheless
, the
tax
 pressure increases.
In other words
, since the installation of
tax
 stations and staff employment are more likely to make a rise in general traffic
tax
as well as
congestion
tax
, each driver would pay a great deal of traffic taxes, so they can struggle with saving money in daily life. To recapitulate, the
tax
 pressure increases but citizens are more likely to utilise public transport and those who are not driving become healthy.
Thus
, imposing a
congestion
tax
 is ideal.
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