Many criminals commit further crimes as soon as they released from prison. What do you think are the causes of this? What possible solutions can you suggest.

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after they release from imprisonment. In my
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, poverty and outcasts from
society
is the main cause of
this
trend,
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, I believe there are many measures
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be taken by governments to tackle
this
issue. Regarding reasons,
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, the most of
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policy
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concentrate on
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the inmates rather than rehabilitation.
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, when criminals release to
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they do not have useful skills
such
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vocational training or
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degree to help them to find a better career,which
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motivate
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them to re-offending in order to meet their
baills
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bills
and
familiy
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family
responsibilities.
Secondly
,
society
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accept ex-convict and nobody
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to live near ex-convict ,which
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put social pressure
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ex-prisoners.
Therefore
, they feel isolated and struggle with mental health
then
they return to law break. In
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of solutions, I would like to recommend some steps
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taken
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by the
government
to mitigate
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issue. To being,
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should provide educational and vocational programs in prisons in order to educate felons valuable skills , which can prepare them
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their future career after
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leaves jail.
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, in Saudi Arabia, the
government
gives the
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opportunity
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to
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their study online or teach them special
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namely, cooking, washing,
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.
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measure, the
government
should work to raise
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awareness
among members of
society
to incentivize them to welcome
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and not reject them. In conclusion , it seems to me that the main cause of re-offending is poverty and challenges
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ex-prisoners
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from
community
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, and I suggested some
meausre
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measure
measures
to tackle
this
problem inculding,
rehabilitation
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including rehabilitation
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of criminals,
rais
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and rais
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of awareness
aomng
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among
society
to accept them.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Rehabilitation
  • Reintegrate
  • Social stigma
  • Recidivism
  • Criminal records
  • Ex-offender
  • Associations
  • Comprehensive
  • Workforce
  • Mentoring
  • Incentivize
  • Stigmatize
  • Subsidies
  • Legitimate
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