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Essay topics: Multinational companies are becoming increasingly common in developing countries. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this?

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companies
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 with a wide variety of nationalities are getting significantly popular in growing countries.
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 phenomenon has upsides like developing an excellent lifestyle by bringing employees from more advanced territories.
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, they may become competitors of local firms and cause financial issues
to
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 them. I opine prons
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weigh
 out cons as explained below. Having multinational
companies
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 in a region means bringing individuals with different backgrounds, cultures, and educations to that place which leads to
enhancement
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 of people's mindset growth. To illustrate, if some Europeans, Americans, and Australians move to a developing country like Turkey to work for those
companies
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, they will bring their thoughts, behaviour, and culture as well.
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, little by little, their coworkers will get influenced by them and will show Improvement in their personalities.
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 Will spread all around the cities and soon local people would have a better way to think and live. The results of recent research shows, gossiping in Denizli city
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 is located in Turkey has decreased by 50% in only two years
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 copying
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 lifestyle they have seen in their
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 routines. It simply shows by merging cultures the ones in third or
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 countries can benefit from it. On the other side, these firms are able to use
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 and technology of other parts of the world thanks to their International workers.
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 they may become more successful in an area and pose a danger of bankruptcy for peer businesses Recent research revealed that 25% of all businesses have
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disappeared after being incapable of competing with their rivals. In conclusion,
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 multinational
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 are growing in developing territories it can be beneficial for enhancing
culture
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the culture
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 of the area,
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 it can have awful effects on regional jobs. I personally believe
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 is a positive development and side effects can be tackled by suitable approaches
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