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The graph below shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line chart illustrates the
rate
 of people
who
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aged 65 and over in the
USA
,
Sweden
 and
Japan
 from the past to future
prediction
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 between 1940 to 2040.
Overall
, the elder people in the
USA
 and
Sweden
 are more than
Japan
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in Japan
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 in the majority of
timeframe
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the timeframe
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. The percentage of the aged 65 and over in the
USA
 is
the
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 top of the three but
replaced
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 by
Sweden
 and
Japan
 in the middle and the end of the statistic.
Furthermore
, the most significant difference in the period given
is
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in
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Japan
 in the 2020s.
Initially
, the
rate
 of elder in the
USA
 is stand at approximately 9.5% in 1940 compared to 7.5% and 5% in
Sweden
 and
Japan
 respectively. In
1990s
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the 1990s
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, there was
a compelling evidence
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 at around 14.5%, displaying
Sweden
 surpassed the
USA
 elder
rate
. By following
50-year
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the 50-year
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 period,
Sweden
 has a
fluctuated
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 increase and
predicted
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is predicted
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 to
25
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be 25
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% in 2040,
by contrast
,
USA
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the USA
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 will
comes
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 to about 22.5%. In terms of
Japan
, old people in
Japan
was
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declined in the initial 20 years,
than
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then
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 remaining the level
at
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of
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 4% until
1980s
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the 1980s
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. Before
2030s
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the 2030s
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, the elder
rate
 in
Japan
is grow
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 steadily to 10%.
However
, the statistic predicts that there will be a dramatical increase in the
last
 10 years, which reach
the
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27%, making
Japan
 become the most elder inhabitants country.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words rate, usa, sweden, japan with synonyms.
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