Your friend has a baby recently and you bought a present for baby. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter: Describe what you bought? Why you choose the present? Suggest some arrangements to visit your friend to bring the present

Dear Sara, I'm so glad to hear about the new family member's arrival. Shen showed me some pictures of
Godwin
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. He is so adorable
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I can't wait to meet you guys. Yesterday, I went to the nearby mall looking for presents for our dear
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. I was so astonished to find out that there are so many choices
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I wasn't sure what to buy
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then
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I saw a baby in a stroller playing with rattles. It was so colourful
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he smiled each time
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he heard the sound
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I bought one for
Godwin
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. It's made of wood, so need to worry if he nibs on it. I
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got him a baby hamper. I'll be around the city to visit one of my clients tomorrow
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have thought of visiting you. If you are free, let me know
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just drop by to see you, Alex and
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. Take care. Looking forward to seeing you tomorrow. Best Regards, Green.

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structure
Put one idea in each paragraph
cohesion
Use short, easy words and simple links to join ideas
grammar
Fix small errors in grammar and spelling (like comma use and 'nibs')
tone
Warm and friendly tone
content
Clear what you bought and why
Topic Vocabulary:
  • hand-knitted
  • texture
  • personal touch
  • uniqueness
  • effort
  • warmth
  • proposing
  • casual
  • comfortable
  • acknowledging
  • hectic
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