Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

The question of whether the main environmental issue of our generation is the
loss
of some kinds of animals and some
species
of
plants
or not is a controversial topic today, as many people are struggling with environmental worries. There are valid arguments on both sides which I will discuss now. On the one hand, opponents of
this
debate that considers the
loss
of some
species
as the main problem, point to the lack of fresh
water
as the most important crisis that our planet is facing. The amount of fresh and sweet
water
is going to end in the near future and there is a great concern about providing drinking
water
for the next generation.
Secondly
, many experts maintain that global warming is the second priority to be concerned about. The temperature of the earth has increased since the
industrial revolution
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and in a few years, it’s going to affect every living creature’s life.
For instance
, global warming has caused a change in the amount of rain, which affects farming and
consequently
, it would affect the amount of food which is produced by farming. So,
this
lack of food will affect all societies.
On the other hand
, it is said that the extinction of different kinds of animals and
plants
is going to affect the whole climate and
finally
the
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humans'
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lives.
For example
, some
species
of
plants
are really efficient in producing oxygen which is essential for breathing. So, the
loss
of these
plants
is going to cause serious problems for the human being.
To conclude
, all environmental issues should be taken seriously. But there are main issues which are a priority,
such
as the lack of fresh
water
. I feel there are more urgent problems than the
loss
of some
species
of
plants
and animals that should be worried about. Unless they are as important as others, the priority of some problems outweighs the others.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • biodiversity
  • extinction
  • habitat loss
  • ecosystem
  • food chain
  • imbalance
  • interconnected
  • climate change
  • pollution
  • personal actions
  • policy changes
  • education
  • awareness
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