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Should school education be made compulsory till the age of 18 years? Support your opinion with reasons and examples

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Nowadays with the advent of new technologies and different types of education
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 home-schooling or online learning literacy rates even in developing countries are growing up any minute. Governments should make education compulsory for all children especially those under 18 years old for a number of justifications. In
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 view and give my rationales.
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 with, All children especially those who are under eighteen need knowledge and skill ,especially in developing countries where there are no appropriate
schools
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 in many areas. Primarily, children should be banned from working from an early age and families should encourage them and send them to
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. More importantly, a lack of basic knowledge for pupils may result in worst work opportunities
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 making less money compared to their educated peers.
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, governments by making fixed rules and investing in
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 can improve their economy in a not-so-distant future.
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, supplying funds for building
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 and paying for teachers could help in nurturing professional employees
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 doctors and engineers. Admittedly, studies have shown that undergraduate students are less likely to commit any type of crime because they are exposed to the world of knowledge and information
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 of wandering in the city and using drugs.
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, I personally believe that governments by providing books or computers by donation or investing a good portion of the budget in
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 and colleges and
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 ruling properly for youngsters can guarantee a better future for the country and society,
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 fewer rates of crime commitments and drug addiction.
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