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Some people think that it's a good idea to socialise with work colleagues during evenings and weekends. Other people think it's important to keep working life completely separate from social life. Discuss both views and give your opinion

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While
 some people believe spending
time
 with colleagues in their free
time
 is beneficial, others think it is important to separate
work
life
 from social
life
. In the bellow essay, I will elaborate on both views
as well as
 my own point of view. On the one hand, colleagues could be good friends in our social
life
. We spent most of our day with our coworkers,
consequently
, our relationship with them could be friendly and deep in emotions.
In addition
, it tends to be beneficial to solve job problems and discuss them during evenings and weekends and probably makes us more productive.
For example
, when two peers have a challenge in their business which is needed to be solved, spending their whole weekend together having fun
as well as
 trying to find a solution to that issue, eventually outcome tends to be great.
On the other hand
, it is crucial to keep in balance
work
life
 and private
life
 at the same
time
. After hours of spending
time
 with job issues which sometimes are stressful, there is a need to be with family and completely out of the
work
 matters.
Also
, many friendships which are
work
-based would not have an ideal future because of business problems.
For instance
, many couples who are working in the same workplace have difficulties in their married
life
. In my point of view,
while
 having a good relationship with our colleagues would have many advantages, keeping the social
life
 separate from
work
life
 is more vital and has a positive impact on our
life
 satisfaction sense. In conclusion,
Although
 it is good to be friends with coworkers and have an impact on productivity, I believe it is finer to separate
work
life
 and social
life
 in order to prevent some relationship problems.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • colleagues
  • socialising
  • work relationships
  • teamwork
  • positive
  • supportive
  • work environment
  • personal relationships
  • collaboration
  • communication
  • stress
  • well-being
  • work-life balance
  • personal time
  • boundaries
  • conflicts
  • burnout
  • professional
  • personal identities
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